The Boots of Horror - Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *NecroHyphen (01), Feb 19, 2011.

  1. This is the feedback thread, please post what you thought about my story.
    Don't mind if it's bad, it all helps! :D
     
    #1 *NecroHyphen (01), Feb 19, 2011
  2. Pretty good! Just write a little more, an you'll be on your way!
     
    #2 MovesLikeJagger, Feb 19, 2011
  3. Rather mysterious. I like that. Nice descriptions too.
     
    #3 Storallelite, Feb 19, 2011
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    #4 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 19, 2011
  5. Thx everyone! :D
     
    #5 *NecroHyphen (01), Feb 19, 2011
  6. AWESOMAZING
     
    #6 FeatherHunter, Feb 19, 2011
  7. (Awesome Amazing)
     
    #7 *NecroHyphen (01), Feb 19, 2011
  8. 
     
    #8 Storallelite, Feb 19, 2011
  9. I like it!

    Just one problem - for a moment, you switched tenses.
     
    #9 cheesemuffin, Feb 20, 2011
  10. That's the point, I will frequently change from the boots and the people...
     
    #10 *NecroHyphen (01), Feb 20, 2011
  11. No I mean past and present tense.

    Like....

    As he walks over to the boots....

    And then three sentences later-

    As he walked over to the boots
     
    #11 cheesemuffin, Feb 20, 2011
  12. Where did I do that?
     
    #12 *NecroHyphen (01), Feb 20, 2011
  13. Somewhere in the middle
     
    #13 cheesemuffin, Feb 20, 2011
  14. Helpful...
     
    #14 *NecroHyphen (01), Feb 20, 2011
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