The Awakening- Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by llIlI_LR-RIPPER_IllII, Mar 6, 2012.

  1. Yeah. I was bored. :)
     
  2. great story! written with excellence and skill
     
  3. There will be more chapters to come if y'all bother me
     
  4. Also, do you feel that I captured your essence DBo?
     
  5. Gosh! I got so senti near the end...got emotional and started crying...youre awesome!
     
  6. Eek wrong post...ah that post....it was seriously great...you have a bright future in literature! :D :D
     
  7. @belle

    you captured much of my essence. but not all. there is much still unknown to you young one.

    but your story was superb. I hope you expand on this story.

    I'm excited to know more about the characters!
     
  8.  I loved it.  fangZZZ!!! Dbo is awesome too 
     
  9. That was really awesome!! WRITE MORE!!! :D
     
  10. *steals story*


    Noone will ever know.
     
  11. Heh.

    It was an interesting read. Skillfully written. Maybe it pleased cheese o_O
     
  12. U managed to please Dbo... That says it all
     
  13. * waits for chapter 2 * 
     
  14. Well, being one who writes about KaW at midnight, just about to fall asleep, I won't say my writing is topnotch.

    This was pretty damn good, though. Then again, maybe it has something to do with the fact you have a major in creative writing.
     
  15. Chapter 2 :) Worse than the first :)
     
  16.  I ...




    LOVED IT MORE THAN CHAPTER 1 !!!!  again again again!!!  this is a must read ;)
     
  17. Nice. Whats the fastest way to bother you so you can finish it? I didn't read it all but it looked extremely promising. It could very well become my favorite fanfic piece besides a finished endgame which will probably never happen.
     
  18. 1 thing, make more paragraphs. Sometimes its more enjoyable to read a story when its separated and its less of an eyestrain... Otherwise well written.

    And if u did do paragraphs, on the ipod u have to hit the return button twice.