[Story]Eramus Noobius

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Sanguine, Nov 28, 2014.

  1. The door opened and the bright dawn sun poured in. Specks of dust danced in the light as she squinted against the glare. Stepping her bare feet onto the cobble walkway green leaves fell from the above tree. It was spring. Turning around and looking up into the old oak a black figure loomed. "What is your business here?", she ordered the figure to answer. The cease of fire with the YAFI clan had been granted just days before. She knew they would not break that moral code. Reaching her hand behind her back she grasped the handle to her Diamondiferous awaiting a answer. After a short pause in time the perching dark figure said in a deep voice "I've been looking for you Reenya.....". At the sound of her name she dropped her guard. Only her fellow Noobs knew of her birth name so why would this one be in a tree. The figure stood up in the tree dropping to the ground in front of her. Her eyes lit up like fireflies and she jumped into his arms. Acapella hugged her tightly. "Heh I missed you too little sis.", he chuckled.


    Seven years ago there was a great battle. The Battle Of Black Hand took place in the lowlands. Many many great soldiers lost their lives fighting for what the Noobs thought was right. Black Hand believed in anarchy over all, the Noobs raised themselves on dictatorship. In a effort to keep the peace they attacked the Black Hand. A six month long war it was, off the system of respect for your enemy. A low point in the history of both clans. At the turning point of the war the Black Hand over took the Noobs. The battlefield cried blood tears. Young Reenya followed her brother and her father into battle. Her father being Lead War Commander loved the art of war. Sadly he lost his life to it. Brother Acapella was taken captive late in the war. Reenya took charge threw the tears and lead the war the best she could. In the end the Noobs retreated with the few troops they had left alive and went into hiding.


    Pulling back from the warm embrace she looked into his eyes. "What happened?", she asked softly. Acapella looked around and ushered her into the Noob hideout. Once inside Reenya set the teapot by the fire pit. It was still early morning and the others hadn't woke yet. "How have you been holding up?", her brother asked as he fished something from his pocket. "As well as possible. Doing our best to gather the Noobs who've strayed." Putting his hand back atop the table Acapella held a small round coin. Reenya tilted her head to the side. "A shiny penny?", she asked. "You know what I've realized? That we take the little things in life for granted. Look at this penny.", he rambled holding it up between them. "Something so simple but so beautiful. Like you sis.", he laughed and she took the penny from his hand. "Oh whatever. Where have you been?", Reenya asked. "Around. I escaped. I've been venturing in the Hoarfrost. I knew you'd have a strong enough heart to take over sis. Father knew." At the mentioning of their father her heart tightened. "I miss him...", she whispered. "I know hun. I do too." As the mood in the room got darker the teapot whistled softly getting louder by the second. "Get ready heh." Reenya smiled at her brother and he gave her a confused look. At the sound of the teapot the hideaway awoke with life. The sound of footsteps could be heard from the kitchen as the young Noobs got prepared for the morning training. The elder Noobs entered the kitchen each taking a seat at the table.


    "We have to make our comeback soon.", TinyDuck said as she sipped her cup of tea Reenya had made her. "Are we strong enough yet is the question. I worry for the younger Noobs.", Nalyd admitted to the group of experienced warriors as he glanced out the window to the small training grounds. "We surely have enough Potions. And we've been lucky with the mage and her enchantments. We cannot and will not stay hidden forever.", Reenya said. Late as usual War Commander Hawk entered the room pouring himself a cup of tea. "The young ones are ready. Trust me.", he said, being the one who trains them. Reenya nodded to the group as she held her fingers in the special Noob symbol and the others did the same. They then parted ways to prepare.


    The sound of galloping horses could be heard across the battlefield and the vibration threw the feet of the awaiting Black Hand. A rematch for the ages it would be. Both clans now stronger and with hardened souls they were ready for anything, even death. It was two past high noon when both clans had gathered. The younger Noobs worked behind the elders spreading the spells of the alchemist among the fighters. Both clans casted Wave Of Conflict there was no going back. All the kingdoms knew of this war now. Battle Fury and Fog Of War. The Noobs now had a blueish redish aura around them as they said last minute prayers. Reenya would stay behind with the younger Noobs. A Seal Of Loyalty was set. She heard the sound of ferocious growls as her personal Allie Woifie vanished from sight. He had requested rage elixirs for the battle. Each elder was atop a horse. TinyDuck, a small woman with short choppy blond hair that's tips looked like little duck tails, Nalyd a great hero who'd taken down many a warbeast singlehandedly, War Commander Hawk a very handsome man with the body of the Greek gods, Acapella who looked just like his father, and Reenya a truly amazing female warrior. Woifie grew more impatient by the second and took off at full speed toward the Black Hand. Reenya noticed his presence move and nudged Hawk "Its time.", she said.


    Reenya gathered the attention of the warriors and spies. "We have waited very long for this moment to come. This is our battlefield, this is our time, this is a war that will make us known again! Today we will fight for those who've fallen. Our brothers and sisters, our mothers and...fathers." She looked at her brother as she said the last word and it was as if a divine shadow crept onto the Noobs side of the battlefield. Reenya's sprit lifted as the shadow reached her. "I'm here for you...", a familiar voice whispered into her ear. She looked across the faces of the many Noobs and noticed them having the same reaction. Acapella trotted his horse up next to hers and grabbed her hand tightly speaking in a strong tone "Noobs. By the end of this war we will not be Noobs! We are strong fighters with brave souls. We will win this test of our loyalty and come out on top! Mark my words I promise these things." Reenya spoke in a soft voice "Once we were Noobs..." "But not anymore!", Hawk shouted as he raised his sword toward the Black Hand. "Ahhhhh!" Reenya yelled and the fighters followed suit taking off into the battle of their lives.
     
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    Previously published for the KaW Writers Competition. Now being expanded on and I wanted to publish by myself.
     
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    Reserved
     
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    Reserved
     
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    Reserved
     
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    Pretty good actually. Read whole thing.

    A few random line breaks dont make sense. Few grammatical errors. Couldve led to the "Once we were noobs" a little better as it should be the main quote of the piece. A few spelling errors.

    Overall pretty good
     
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    Support

    But it needs more..



    Ah yes I remember.

    It just needs more..




    Err
    Bacon?
    Spacing?
    Stuff?
    Rick rolls?
    Colour?

    I vote more rick rolls
     
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    Thank you. I'll edit and edit some more.
     
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    If TRULY wanted, I tear apart college papers :lol: I could go into more detail
     
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    I might ask for you to do that later on.
     
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    Long ass quotes 
     
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    Quotes? Where?
     
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    Quotes everywhere!... Nah jk good work. A few edits and I it'll be perfect.
     
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    I disliked it. Wasn't organized, and sorta jumped to it. Eh 7/10 seen better
     
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    Ummm kaw hasn't been around for 7 years  but great read 
     
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    Definitely needs more bacon.
     
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    [link="http.//www.google.com"] test
     
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    Definitely needs less.... Less...... Words
     
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    Okay...?