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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by ColtonAllen, Jun 20, 2011.

  1. Just the prologue now. I'll post the first chapter eventually. Don't be afraid to give your honest opinion on anything. I welcome criticism. Any suggestions that you feel would enhance the story can also be posted and I will consider them. I'll say this beforehand: NO. you may not be in the story, and NO. you may not have your own kingdom, Empire, Island, ect.
     
  2. Glad you decided to post it. Nice title!
     
  3. Hey, could I be in the story? :lol: :lol: :lol:

    iZ
     
  4. ...glad to know you know how to read, Zaln...
     
  5. Isnt someone being a little meanie butt :p

    iZaln
     
  6. Sure Zaln. You can be in it. You can have your own duchey too 
     
  7. Kinda cant see emoji lol. And whats a duchey?

    iZaln
     
  8. It's a great start
     
  9. Its a province of a kingdom or empire.
     
  10. Haha okay! Lol I'm gettin my own part of the world lol. Ask and you shall receive xD

    iZ
     
  11. Sorry, there's no E. it's duchy.

    How may I serve your Duke of Zaln?
     
  12. dude, the period after the capitalized "no"? Why put a period, why not a damn comma?
     
  13. Typing fast. I'm playing tennis and KAW and it is hard
     
  14. And when you say no one gets to be in it, does that mean only the rest if us can't and Zaln can, or just everyone?
     
  15. He doesn't really get to be in it. We've known each other a long time and joke around a bit. He put me in his first story and killed me. He's lucky I don't put him in here and kill him off.
     
  16. You know you want to...

    Its tempting isn't it?

    Do it! 


    I like it, just use phargraphing and you're good to go!
     
  17. Haha I play tennis a lot too! But in doin that in a few weeks. Doing soccer ATM haha.

    And you didn't die lol! You just got a nasty gash in your head lol! Accusing me... Haha. Yeah Colt-On-Allen an me gooo way back. To forum clan times and what not haha.

    iZaln