SOMEBODY Feedback/discussion thread

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by L00KER, Mar 1, 2013.

  1. Hey guys feedback here please


    If you hate my writing don't even say anything
     
    #1 L00KER, Mar 1, 2013
  2. I hate your writing, that's my feedback.
     
    #2 xXxGAVINxXx, Mar 1, 2013
  3. Like I don't even know what SOMEBODY was? I saw your other thread but it made no sense.
     
    #3 xXxGAVINxXx, Mar 1, 2013
  4. What???
     
    #4 L00KER, Mar 1, 2013
  5. Sorry for starting off slow. But I'm making chapter 2 much longer
     
    #5 L00KER, Mar 1, 2013
  6. I think it's ok  u just need to have more detail, right punctuation, and longer chapters 
     
    #6 -TwistedFate-, Mar 1, 2013
  7. Ok thanks :)
     
    #7 L00KER, Mar 2, 2013
  8. Next chapter up ....


    Fyi her family don't play roles in the story


    And I'm trying to show thatvshe only fights when provoked
     
    #8 L00KER, Mar 2, 2013
  9. You seem to have a good story.
    What you need though, is: Better punctuation, longer chapters, better grammar and sentences, and a few other things to make it look... Right.
    You have a seemingly good story ATM, you just need to develop it.
     
    #9 RenamedPhoenix, Mar 3, 2013
  10. Chapter 3 up :) enioy
     
    #10 L00KER, Mar 4, 2013
  11. Sorry for horrorible spelling its not by best area ............ -'-
     
    #11 L00KER, Mar 4, 2013
  12. Nice I like it
     
    #12 TF-The-Silver-Knight-, Mar 7, 2013
  13. Thanks silver knight :)

    Chapter 4 up .... hope you guys like this



    I WAS GOING TO WRITE THIS WITH IGTS BUT SUE BLOCKED ME DELETING ALL MY CHAPTERS!!!!!!
     
    #13 L00KER, Mar 9, 2013
  14. And yes I still had the first two sent to my alt :)

    I HAD ALL THE BOOK WRITEN AND NOW I HAVE TO WRITE IT ALL OVER!!!!
     
    #14 L00KER, Mar 9, 2013
  15. I thought fan fiction was excluded from the Active Topics. Was this changed or did I misread the section that this is in?
     
    #15 xXP_3Xx_Truz_xXP_3Xx, Mar 9, 2013
  16. You probably misread. Ff is never in at
     
    #16 TF-The-Silver-Knight-, Mar 9, 2013

  17. I think it may be on the computer version, I doubled checked and it was in the Active Topics. I don't use my mac for KaW much. Anyway carry on sorry to disrupt you guys. :)
     
    #17 xXP_3Xx_Truz_xXP_3Xx, Mar 9, 2013
  18. :lol: lol. Im liking the book so far. Please continue
     
    #18 TF-The-Silver-Knight-, Mar 9, 2013
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