Sneak peek of my book hells rising!!!

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Burningclaw, Dec 18, 2010.

  1. This is my first book Plz go easy


    Hells rising
    My name is Patrick, my life basically ended when he returned...His name was Phillip he was my freind until today.The day started out as a normal day, I got dressed and walked to the bus. As usual I got on, but somthing was different. My freind all said :Hi are you the new student?I countered :No I know all of you stop messing around.
    "we don't know you."
    "but I know all of you"
    Then I list there names, and that is when my life changed for good...

    Ch.2
    The roof of the bus was torn of by what looked like a chicken with a bad hair due. But no one appeared to see, I was taken aback. The thing appeared to have three eyes all red, glaring right at me. I tried to not look so it wouldn't see that it was me, but as if it could read my mind like a book, it swooped down and grabbed me. I could think of a million things I would rather due then be lifted out of my bus bye a over grown chicken.

    Ch.3 
    Oh god I thought why is it always me, I get bullied, I have my homework stolen, I get kidnaped by a chicken,A CHICKEN of all the things a chicken. Wait...Its a harpy. We flew every where, but we stopped, and the harpy got someone else...Oh my lord I thought as I recognize my x-best friend Philip...He flailed and screamed as we got closer to our target. We where going to the grand canyon. When we arrived we were brutally dropped. As we free fell I felt lighter as we neared the floor. 

    Ch.4
    When we hit the floor I felt dead, but I felt like I was still falling. Maybe after you die u feel the same way for eternity,but this time we hit water, or what seemed to be water it was warm and thick. I thought I was going to pass out when I learned what it was. It was blood, blood of the ones lost here. I saw a skull then I saw Phillip lying on the ground. I was the lucky one, Phillip was dead...