Shadow's Journal Feedback/chat

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *LeafstormXAshpelt (01), Dec 20, 2010.

  1. Thank you burningclaw for letting me use your character. Thank you myself for the story ine and well comment, rate, and give feedback here
     
  2. Shadow, I'm sorry to say this but you can't make a story that short and start a second book. It's only one post too and that's about as long as an average chapter. Instead of a whole new story maybe just continue it from there.
     
  3. i am not a fail i can write however i LIKE KIMBER
     
  4. SEE IF YOU CAN DO BETTER THAN
     
  5. If you can't take criticism... Good luck.
     
  6. the storyline stays the same throughout the story it's a bloodline meaning that your supossed to die and in your wil hand the blade, Alaximas to your decendant


    gtg
     
  7. I can't write but neither van u
     
  8. I did not enjoy it, it was...confusing and lacked detail, very short, and your characters are flat ( half elven bff, wtf?)
     
  9. bff=best friend forever and half-elven=that Gandol is part elven