Your grammar is all wrong, one example , in the last paragraph I saw that you wrote "but we can't arrest him for no reason" I believe what you are looking for is "but we can't arrest him 'without cause'". Another thing is you need to check your paragraphs before you post, you need Capitals(sp) and much more, I suggest you take things a bit slower and make a few edits, along with proof reading/writing on paper before you post...other than that your names are...creative
Take it slow pokemon cos Ryan is 12 like me and I k ow how hard it is to write a story like that. Anyway that story is Awesome I it. Pls keep writing more