Rising Darkness

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Secret-Blade, May 9, 2012.

  1. Hello, my name is Secret. This is my land, the land of Crevlok. Weird name, I know. I'm only 12, but I'm already enrolled at the school of Clashing Swords And Scepters. It's a cool place, and I'm training to be a Mage and Warrior. I have some powerful friends. Sapphire, Jewel, Revnok, and Reclik. Weird names, I get it. Sapphire is also my girlfriend. We're just Elves, so we come from weird. Now before we get to what's happening, the race of Elves aren't small and short like the humans think. We're actually quite tall, with mostly all of us having blue eyes. Now, with the story.

    I was strolling through the courtyard of the school, with everybody with me. We were all just using our personal powers, practicing with them. Mine was telepathy, able to read minds and communicate with them. When I was doing it, they were also able to communicate back.
     
  2. is this going to be continued?
     
  3. hello. your name is stupid. stupid dumb the 7th
     
  4. don't listen to d_bo.

    and your story is well done, especially for a twelve year old.
     
  5. Sapphire's was able to detect almost anything. Like, if there was a footprint that had been covered up to cover tracks, she would zero in on it immediatly. Revnok's was being able to see in the night, and had supreme hearing. Jewel's was, oddly enough, able to absorb images from jewels. Like memories. Reclik's was bein able to talk and control animals. Now, we just got to the end of the courtyard. We saw headmaster George running toward us. I wondered, what was he coming for. I activated my personal power, and told my magic to run straight to his mind. Turns out, he was just telling us that lessons were beginning again. I called out, "Okay, we know. See ya!" He looked confused at first, then nodded. He walked back, and I told my friends that he was just telling us lessons were beginning again. "Means I have Sword Practice lessons." I said. Reclik said, "See you guys around." I nodded, then ran off, everyone's heads buzzing with one message, "Meet you at lunch." I ran off to the building. Other students were starting to gather, so I pulled out my sword, Garhim, and started slicing up a dummy. Sapphire was also here. We both tag-teamed, and the dummy was shredded in seconds. We were the perfect combo, her and I. Exactly why we had started dating. We sparred each other, just as "Teach" arrived.
     
  6. More coming, just heading out to dinner! Posting feedback thread when I get back.
     
  7. for a 12 year old. you should find a new hobby. this is utter garbage
     
  8. lol rambling nonsense is all this is
     
  9. your posts are a bunch of rambling nonsense. back off the legitimate posters, d.
     
  10. shut the hell up you filthy nobody.

    his "stories" are garbage
     
  11. atk 15/12/11 np
     
  12. oh no. my feelings are so hurt. you attacked and beat a hansel?

    bahaha

    dumbass
     
  13. never going to stop... :lol:
     
  14. bring it on. you act like you're some battle hardened vet.
     
  15. lol wut? i have been in like all of 2 system wars and 3 osws....i am a pwar noob through and through.

    no...i am acting like i am sick of your fail trolls.
     
  16. fail troll? I'm not a troll. his writing DOES suck. look at the feedback for his other story. this certainly isn't any better.

    you've done more than allow yourself to be provoked by a single comment and took the forums into the mainstream.

    fine with me.
     

  17. i um...didn't understand the point you were trying to convey there... :?
     
  18. :lol: you used spells :lol:
     
  19. why not? I have over 800 mith. and I don't have many excuses to use any

    you're an obvious one