Random Poem

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by -DaveStrider-, Jun 13, 2012.

  1. Someday, when the world
    Is cold and grey,
    We'll miss the lush green
    Of grass, and
    Vibrant turquiose
    Of joyful streams...

    Maybe then we'll see
    What we really did,
    How much we killed our home,
    To a point of no return.

    {{Written totally off the top of my head, in 2 minutes flat. Critique please?}}
     
  2. This kind of one-post stuff belongs in the Writer's Cafe.

    I refuse to comment further.
     
  3. Sorry :3 I'll add more later...x/
     
  4. It's good takes me longer to write poems
     
  5. This is one of mine :

    Sadness.

    It hangs in the air,
    The big grey cloud
    It's cries of thunder
    Echo around.

    "What is it?"
    I hear you wonder,
    "What is it saying?"
    For that is not thunder.

    I look at the cloud,
    It weeps tears of rain
    But that Is not normal,
    For they're tears of pain.

    "What Is it?"
    I hear you demand, "Please explain,"
    "Why is it crying?"
    For that Is no rain.

    They are shattered dreams,
    Echoed into the night
    For, that is not thunder
    My dear you are right.

    "What is the cloud?"
    I hear you ask, "What is this?"
    My dear please be patient.
    The cloud is sadness.

    It hangs in the air
    The big grey cloud
    It's cries of distress
    Echo around.

    Thousands of people
    Contribute and share
    Their feelings with many,
    Through this cloud in the air.

    "What is the cloud?"
    I hear you ask, "What is this?"
    My dear, please be patient.
    The cloud is sadness.

    If you don't get it, re-read
     
  6. did you write that? Its really good
     
  7. Yes thanks :D
    Wait was that for me or kat Marc?
     
  8. Dude, make your own thread.
     
  9. Lose the attitude.
     
  10. No, I won't because that's just stupid.