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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *IRONhulk (01), Mar 2, 2011.

  1. Preview to mah story
    An Orc ned jabahafar wakes up gets his club and starts smashing things.
    first sentence
     
  2. Are you going to try for real? Or just make up really stupid stories.
     
  3. That's a rubbish opener, it looks like a five year old wrote it. No ones gonna read it because of rep. Knowing you you'll abandon it after two paragraphs. And I thought you quit
     
  4. How so I know I'm really bad at intros. But what am I supposed to say the Orc gazed into the sunset with a fire in his eyes.knowing it was time he picked up his axe and starting marching toward the imperial city.
    is that better
     
  5. The bad grammer overload hurts my head
     
  6. i sawe a story tht was kinda like that sentence :O
    but i forgot exactly wat it said
    its something like....
    a man come's and he picks up a stick and come's and hits the "boat" the dad and the son were never seen again!
    or something like tht lol
    my friend showed it to me it was a story somebody used in a rly big important standardized test or something lol