Prayer

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Requital, Dec 29, 2012.

  1. Mister please explain away
    These feelings I feel today
    They are so foreign to me
    Like I was blind but now I see
    Held down for Forever it seems
    Tearing me apart at the seams
    Incarceration of my heart
    No longer, a fresh start
    these chains have been broken
    By a ladies words soft spoken
    Intriguing and totally new to me
    They have me where I can barely breathe
    It's been long, way too long
    Since I've felt it this strong
    Wait, I'm a lier
    I've never felt it make me fly higher
    Soaring through the clouds
    Just talking to her makes me proud
    If I can only make her mine
    I'd be happy till the end of time
    But I'm not good enough
    She's too good for me, I'm too rough
    What do i do and say
    To keep her interested another day
    I don't know so i sing the blues
    Rack my brain till I find a clue
    So mister please explain in words I understand
    Make me see how to show her I'm a good man
    Because i can't do it alone
    I need you as the cornerstone
     
  2. Wow.

    That's really sweet. I think in a couple places your meter falters a little bit, but that's nothing a little refinement can't fix.
     
  3. What do you mean by meter? Thanks for the advice btw!