Oath of Silence - Feedback

That's cool. You don't have to say anything. I'll just sit here with my beverage and be alone

 

It sounds interesting. I'm hooked, more please

 

It has a lot of potential but I think it was a bit short. Also, check the spelling and grammar, I almost stopped reading after the 2nd mistake I found

 

I've just reread it and I did find an error ("a piece" instead of "at peace") so if you happen to remember what the grammatical errors were, could you let me know? I'd really like to fix them.

Thanks for the feedback!!

 

I love the way his thoughts are jumbled.

 

I like this! The description is lovely. I found another mistake, by the way. It should be "its orange color" not "it's orange color".

 

*its crimson red

Oops.

 

Thanks for the corrections!! I'll make the corrections either tonight or tomorrow, depends on how much homework I procrastinated.