As the desert storm continued to rage across the land, four silhouettes emerged from the shadows out of the alleyways. They each ran across the town to escape their pursuers. "Stop!! Thief!!" was heard all around town followed by laughter. Then all of a sudden, everything went silent.... Soon everything was engulfed in flames and everything was destroyed. Screams were heard as the fires became fiercer and stronger. The only thing remained was the ashes left by innocent people and the scent of a fire. The firefox and the phoenix have spared nothing in their battle. Twenty years later... A young man walks alone in the desert guided by his sand falcon. Only 11km to the town of Anseio and rarely food left for the trip. As he trudged through the sand, faint footsteps could be heard nearby. He turns around to see a horserider as it gallops his way. As soon as the rider nears, they begin to slow down. "You forgot something" the rider says. "What did I forget?" asked Drake, surprised. "The rest of your food!" the rider said, laughing. "Man, you were in too much of a hurry, that you left most of your food back home!" "Oh. Thanks Madrox." Drake said embarressed. They began to start walking when suddenly the ground exploded in front of both of them. "What was that?!" Drake exclaimed. As the smoke cleared away, a silhouette began to take form. "Hey, who's that standing there?" How is it so far? Opinions needed good or bad Be honest please
Hmm. I like the idea. Maybe a bit more background on the former world and the characters would be great. I think an explosion took place way too early. Otherwise, pretty good. Well-written