My story by iwrite co V.2 What do u think?

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by xXxRPL_I_AngusEmpire_l_RPLxXx, Sep 10, 2010.

  1. Chapter 1: hunting

    It's was a full moon, shining faint rays of light down to where I had set up camp for that night 
    I had no fire to warm my muscles and I soon had cramped legs 
     

    I moved painfully pulling myself out of a pile of thorns but it was worth it, my tattered pants and T-shirt provided no protected from the thorns. As I got up, I got up I had blood all over my body dripping down making smearing coming off on anything that I brushed against

    I followed with the most amout of care I could not to alert the deer the tiniest bit that I was behind it. I had been  tracking the same deer now for one and a half days now and I was running low on food

    THUD! The bolt fired from my crossbow hit and hit the deer in it's leg forcing the animal to stumble in pain through the thick undergrowth of the forest  making the wound tear Painfully open makings it bigger untill the deer colapsed on a big lump of grass.
      I had been learning and waiting for this moment all my life growing and learning my skills such learning the throwthe rusty knife that I found when I was playing outside, I also learnt to use  a yew bow my dad made from the yew that colapsed last summer making the wood able to be made into a bow but I never used it untill I turned seven
    From the turned 7 I was a little boy at that stage aiming a little yew bow into a tree and trying to hit a bird that was perched on the edge of the branch
    But this was different it was my first big kill that my poor family would trusting me to bring a good amout of meat back so we can survive the cold nights to come
    I pulled the deer through the broken branchs and the thorn bushes like the one befor. I cut open I deer over a river where i striped it's stomach contents out into the stream startling some fish that darted away trying to avoid the guts from the dead deer 

    as I got closer to home I spotted a faint misty haze telling me that the villege that I lived in was preparing for a cold winters night where the weather was alwas upredictable, wheather it was going to snow, rain, or even some sun that the farmers had treasured each moment of it.

    I walked through into our little wooden hut on the outside of the college where I was meet by my old ragged dad called John who started cooking the deer.  It was the first meal we had had in a few days and as soon as the fat touched my throat it felt the best thing I had had in well ever. 

    Chapter2: for my love

    The hut I walked up to was the same type that I lived in 

    I banged the door of my girlfriends hut her name was samantha,

    She run out surprising me and jumped on me making me fall over in the soft dirt and I was soon covered in dirt 

    "Angus,Angus!"Samantha shouted in my ear "I have been thinking that we should run away from here."

    "why?"I said "this has been our home since we were born, both of us"

    "Do u love me our not?"her voice had strength like she had been waiting for this

    I pondered in my thoughts but soon I agreed that the best thing we could do was run away. Abandoning our families  but life was better away from home.  Were we could live without fear of hunger like now we had a little food in out stomachs but the thought of food made our tummies rubble  

    Chapter 3: Our escape

    I woke up early today and collected the carcass of the deer that I killed with my yew bow two days ago and stripped the carcass's remaining meat from it and stuffed it in my leather pouch and then took a few things and ran outside where Samantha greeted me with a hug

    "are you ready?"I asked 

    "As ready as I'll ever be," samantha giggled 

    And we ran to the camps middle where we toke a horse that was black and left a little money in it's spot but it was still not enough to buy it and we ran out of the camp

    My hear was pulling at my skull as we bolted through the forest and it was only shear luck that we did not stubble and fall off the horse 

    We came along a fire that someone had left in a haste and did not put it out which provided us with warmth and a way that we could cook our meat.   So I decided that cooking on a spilt would be the easiest way. My first attempt the meat slid of the end and the second I burnt but as always it was third time lucky and we ate a little chunk each for our dinner

    Half way into 3. What do u think Kaw?


    Post what ever u want that relates back to the story

      
     
  2. Great! Funny how spelling / punctation slightly different in US. Great story! So who is John??? 
     
  3. I remember posting a comment on this thread...hmmm what happened to it? Oh well!  great job!