Dear FanFic people, Yeah well.... I hadn't posted on my story for a long time and I lost it so I'm going to repost it from the start. Please post your feedback here! Love, Han x
Too much dialogue, I suggest adding more than detail into your story. Other than that, it's pretty good.
I think you should describe what the the setting looks like a bit more. Since you're writing from third person it shouldn't be hard. I like the way the story is progressing and so far it's pretty interesting.