My Sister's Killer FEEDBACK

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *HannahMarie55 (01), Jul 25, 2011.

  1. Dear FanFic people,
    Yeah well.... I hadn't posted on my story for a long time and I lost it so I'm going to repost it from the start.
    Please post your feedback here!
    Love,
    Han x
     
  2. I like the story so far, it's very interesting 
     
  3. Thanks and I just posted chapter 3!
     
  4. Too much dialogue, I suggest adding more than detail into your story. Other than that, it's pretty good.
     
  5. Kk I'll work on it
     
  6. I think you should describe what the the setting looks like a bit more. Since you're writing from third person it shouldn't be hard.
    I like the way the story is progressing and so far it's pretty interesting.