My dreamgirl, Once upon a time there was a young boy. he was adventurous and loved to make friends. One time he was playing with his sister when he met a girl her name was dreamgirl. At first he liked her, but as he began to see her truly he found out how perfect she was. He discovered something Inside her. That inspired him in his difficult life. She made everything different. Months passed, and he began to know her as a close friend. He also began to mane other friends. He learned that she was perfect he also met a girlfriend and two other friends. One day he let dreamgirl go. He gave her a different life and lost contact with her. he grew closely attached to his girlfriend and the other friends. one day when he was trying to impress his girlfriend he made a bad mistake, and he looked stupid, his girldfriends ridiculed him and said he was weird and stupid but she would accept him if he performed no more (screwups) she called it. but alas he could not hold back because his other friends seized the opportunity and made him feel horrible. He desperately tried to gain her favour. in a last erich effort he begged her in front of her friends and made her angry, she drove him away abusing him and calling him names. His other friends all followed her example, but as soon as dreamgirl heard the news she ran to comfort him she raised him up and saved him he realized that if the both accept each other good things can come from it and that perfect people are the ones that are right in front of you. you're only publisher. X_DreamGirl_X
Actually... I can't believe I just heard a 1-Dimensional story that's was vaguely emotional. Still though. Really, work harder on your ****. Especially before posting: "Your (are <<da-****?) only publisher." Really.
Pretty nice, but I do agree with Phoenix. Work on grammar a little bit, if this is a legit story and you wish to continue writing And, "Your only publisher." .....
Ok. All respect lost already. I said it's pretty nice. When you put work up, you put it up for critique. So no. Goodbye.
Common story: Check Issues with grammar: Check Not accepting criticism: Check Status banner that implies suicide: Check OP's likely from PiMD. Just saying.
If you criticize the story fine but if you wanna talk bad about me do it on my wall i dont really care