my 1st story

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by -Pixel-, Apr 24, 2011.

  1. The doors swung open as high priest tėthaløn strode into the room, following him came his right hand man grygon. "You called," tėthaløn spoke with a confident accent. "yes," said a voice coming from a shadowy figure, tėthaløn was un-familiar with him. He paused "I'm sorry do I know you?"
    "more than you can imagine..."
    He turned round slowly.
    "no... Not you" tėthaløn muttered.
    Soon after a bolt of black lightning sprouted from the figures finger tips.
    Tėthaløn keeled over hitting the floor with a thud and sending grygon running more lightning and more blood...
     
  2. Pls can I have feed back?
     
  3. Cmon guy feedback plz before I fall asleep 