Mine.

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Ahdragos (01), Jul 11, 2010.

  1. Poem I wrote. Rough still, didn't edit it in the slightest. Wrote off the top of my head.

    No one loved me, no one cared.
    Isolation left my judgement impaired
    No one to hold me, and make it all right
    So I hardened my heart and learned how to fight

    Only my tears to cushion the pain
    Every night in bed they fell like rain
    And everyday I tried to cope
    Searching desperately for a sign of hope

    And then one day I suddenly snapped
    As if from the heavens the thunder clapped
    And there I stood, I was born anew
    The new feelings I had were too good to be true

    My heart was now filled with nothing but rage
    It was like a beast was released from its cage
    When others hurt me they thought it okay
    But now I hurt them and they didn’t like it that way

    No one took the blame for what they had done
    They turned in fear and started to run
    But they could not escape from Karma you see
    It didn’t matter if they tried to flee

    And from the Darkness you suddenly came
    And it was to my heart that you laid claim
    All of the anger you purged from my heart.
    Thanks to your love I have a fresh start.

    You say you love me; it shows in your eyes.
    You speak the truth, no deceit and no lies.
    The problems I face are now in decline
    From the joy that I feel in saying you’re mine.

    Tears of joy now streak my face,
    I finally feel I have found my place.
    It is with you that I surely belong
    Even after I sing my swan song

    I’ll love you and cherish you until the day that I die
    I swear to you now, I won’t make you cry.
    My heart is yours, that is the truth.
    These words I write are meant in sooth.

    Forever more, my heart is yours.
    You’re the only one my heart truly adores
    And as of this day, your heart is mine.
    And I praise it’s true our fates intertwine.
     
  2. Epic win!!!! Do u write poems often? Lol it's actually genuinely good
     
  3. Awesome!!
     
  4. No Cow, I definitely don't write poetry often. I don't write often in general, to be completely honest.
     
  5. Nice poem ahdragos 
     
  6. Lol that's surprising! I thought well u play chess you'd think of your next poem lol
     
  7. Amazing poem 
     
  8. Ahd that was much better writen than some of the posts you wrote while smashing me

    My friend it really was good
     
  9. Nice sounds sortof like a song
     
  10. Pretty good, but it would flow better if the length of the lines didn't vary as often
     
  11. It is epicly awesome...it "move" me
     
  12. True Shol, the speed and inflection with which I say it to myself makes it flow perfectly. But it's relatively impossible to convey those aspects into it. And TBH, I simply refused to alter a word of it from how it was to me, to make it flow better for others. I suppose it's fitting in a sense the rhythm and flow of the poem for me doesn't match for others, since I don't necessarily match the flow and rhythm of other people.
     
  13. That is true, poetry should be made to reflect one's self, not how the rest of the world is.
     
  14. And that said, maybe it's just me, as I like a symmetry to mine
     
  15. I loved it it was very very good :D
     
  16. Very very very beautiful. You should write stuff like this more often ^_^
     
  17. Great! Write more. 
     
  18. that is really good!! no need for edit....
     
  19.  THAT WAS AMAZING!!!
     
  20. Too long. Didn't read.