Maj weds imak

I'm sorry bit....
Fail

and that's apart from all the grammar and spelling errors...

 

It's not even a story if you can't make sense of it because of so many grammar errors.

 

World ?

 

just minor there... Troop(s).

this one is just WHATT??

another WHATT??

Also no paragraphing or dialouge at all.

 

There's a bunch of grammar/spelling and tense errors... Badly layed out... Everyone will laugh, but in pity not enjoyment.

 

I suspect 99.9% of people who read this will think along the lines I do... Spelling errors, unclear, and not entertaining.

 

I would request that you let this thread die and that you run any future story through a writing company first.

 

Horrible grammar, horrible story, horrible thread.

Fail.

 

Thank you. To make it official, I will add an honourary


 DEAD THREAD 

 

ULTRA DEAD![/colour]

 

oops my English pays in bbcodes.

 

Horrible grammar and dumb story.... It sucks

 

Hey I love this story. I paid no nvm to no English gramma and just follow the story. Xplirer I like your sense if humor. Please continue. 

 

Yea same here, it's pretty funny, but I was wondering if it was real?? Who is rak, is that you??

 

Please continue with story. Like you said this isn't an English class

 

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