Love's Destiny

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by no_lyn, Jan 25, 2014.

  1. Once upon a time,there was a girl named Amanda. She had a crush on a boy named Zack,but she was very shy....but one day she finally gatherd up courage to go tell him how she feels,and he said he felt the same way. So they started hanging out together,talking a lot,holding hands in the hall...but then they ran into Zacks friends. They didn't like amanda. She was shy,so she didn't have any friends,she wasn't popular. They said if he still wanted to be cool,and keep his friends,he had to ditch her. So he forced her hand away from his,then pushed her to the ground. They patted him on the back and lefted. Amanda and Zack couldn't even look at each other after that. Amanda became very depressed,she was all alone,an outcast. She felt like nobody accepted her.

    In high school Zack got a girlfriend,she was a cheerleader. Amanda saw how happy he looked with her,how he moved on so easily. It gave lots of metal,and physical pain to Amanda,because that's when she started self-harm...but in reality,he didn't actually love his new girlfriend,it was under peer preasure that he started dateing her. Well it tured out she didn't really love him either,she was just doing it for popularity,because as soon as one of his friends made the football team,she dumped him and started dateing the football player. Soon after,his friends didn't think he was cool anymore,so they replaced him. Zack became depressed, alone.

    Years later,he's so depressed,he can't take it anymore. He waits till night fall to go to the park to hang himself. When he gets there,he sees a woman. He asks why she's there. She looks down and says
    "Same reason as you." Then he looks down and sees the rope in her hands. She looks up and they make eye contact....
    "Amanda!"
    "...Zack?!"
    they both dropped their ropes and hugged each other. He wisperd in her ear
    "I'm sorry I lefted you....but i'm here now,and forever."



    THE END ^_^
     
  2. Many grammatical errors are present in this piece of writing.
     
  3. You posted the EXACT same thread while the original is still in AC and failed to make any corrects 0/10 for effort 
    ~HF
     
  4. HA GAAAAAAAY
     
  5. I didn't mean to post it twice
     
  6. Sounds a bit like High School musical. Lol ;) although I probably shouldn't have even admitted that I've seen that 