Chapter 2 is up some comments would really help /: Anyway hope its a little bit better, I will try to write a lot more :mrgreen:
Horrid grammar. Take a few years worth of classes then possibly try and write something that doesn't burn my eyes out while I attempt to decipher the devastatingly illiterate ramblings of a two-year-old I have just witnessed you attempt to pass off as something a half-assed middle school student could write.
Next chapter up .. sorry if my story sucks. Its only two threads sooo. You guys should be able to deal with it.
Considering the fact that I am Dave's friend and owner, and the fact that she was being sarcastic. I would really not do that if I were you.
But my spies can hit you. Pretty dang sure. Anyways, you want feedback and I'm not going to give it so I'm going to leave. Don't threaten my friends.