Lights Final Shadow ~Comments~

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Ry0l, Mar 16, 2012.

  1. Please post your comments for Lights Final Shadow here ^.^ it would be much appreciated :D

    ~Ryol
     
    #1 Ry0l, Mar 16, 2012
  2. Is this the original Ryol?
     
    #2 Marodo, Mar 16, 2012
  3. Yerperl's
     
    #3 Ry0l, Mar 17, 2012
  4. Isthis the original Morodo :O omg
     
    #4 Ry0l, Mar 17, 2012
  5. Yup! No faker's for me. They're all too scared! Haha jk. Btw i like ur story so far, a bit deranged, but still well written.
     
    #5 Marodo, Mar 17, 2012
  6. ...p.s.
    It's Marodo* 
     
    #6 Marodo, Mar 17, 2012
  7. I'm sorry, so sorry. For the first and best writer in FanFic...

    A TENSE CHANGE IN THE FIRST THREE SENTENCES!? 

    Have we met before?
     
    #7 cheesemuffin, Mar 17, 2012
  8. A tense huh? In a waht? Are you a muffin? :D I like muffins.
     
    #8 Ry0l, Mar 17, 2012
  9. I'm not the best just because i'm the first ._. I'm just a ninja that's really a pirate in a gentlemans chair wearing a Jecht cosplay outfit.
     
    #9 Ry0l, Mar 17, 2012
  10. I liked it, although it was sort of twisted.
    *Scribbles out sort of*
     
    #10 iNTeR_Candidus_MaSS, Mar 17, 2012
  11. Newy one <(o0o<)
     
    #11 Ry0l, Mar 19, 2012
  12. The one thing I would say is to make you've got periods at the ends of your dialogue. And I feel terrible for loving Ion.
     
    #12 Allioss, Mar 19, 2012
  13. :0 why you feel terrible? And huh? Should I have periods at the end of dialouge or not?
     
    #13 Ry0l, Mar 19, 2012
  14. Because Ion seems evil but awesome too 
     
    #14 Allioss, Mar 19, 2012
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