Kingdom Hearts:RoxasLoverForever Fan Fiction Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Maisaka, Jul 2, 2011.

  1. Please give me feedback!!
     
    #1 Maisaka, Jul 2, 2011
  2. Oops!! Don't look at this one! I accidentally made two!! >.< sorry!! Look at my other one!
     
    #2 Maisaka, Jul 2, 2011
  3. Whew... Long title. Haha nice job. Maybe a light spacing in-between paragraphs. Like...

    Shadows leapt around the place in search of Roxas.

    "We know you're hereeeee!" they hissed.

    Roxas herself was behind a wall breathing heavily... Etc


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    So spacing like that between lines makes it easier to read and makes it look nicer.

    iZaln
     
    #3 Nlaz, Jul 2, 2011
  4. Thanks so much!! I will take your advice :) keep reading
     
    #4 Maisaka, Jul 3, 2011
  5. Love it
     
    #5 mark11, Jul 3, 2011
  6. I LOVE IT.....am I supposed to say I hate it?>.<I mean rlly
     
    #6 bellalautner, Jul 4, 2011
  7. Ikr
     
    #7 mark11, Jul 4, 2011
  8. Awww thanks for your support
     
    #8 Maisaka, Jul 4, 2011
  9. Please read my current update on Kingdom Hearts and let me know what you think :)
     
    #9 Maisaka, Jul 6, 2011
  10. ...?
     
    #10 Maisaka, Jul 6, 2011
  11. Good good
     
    #11 mark11, Jul 8, 2011
  12. Thank you mark11
     
    #12 Maisaka, Jul 8, 2011
  13. AWESOME STORY SIS!
     
    #13 bellalautner, Jul 8, 2011
  14. Nice
     
    #14 mark11, Jul 9, 2011
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