KidNapped Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by XxBrooke_ParisXx, Feb 26, 2012.

  1. Post your Comment Of My Story KidNapped Here. Good or Bad I'll read them.
     
  2. When writing a story, use proper spelling and grammar.
     
  3. Without copying, your grammar and spelling suck!
     
  4. Sorry I posted on ur story!!!!-it's was really good, the dramatic stuff came a little too soon, otherwise the intro was cool!
     
  5. your entire story was horrible. find a new hobby. you suck at being a writer
     
  6. @d_bo

    Her clan sucks too....No wonder!!
     
  7. Oh, and I stopped reading after you wrote: "I'm Briar Sanders, I'm 16, and my ferternal twin sister is my best friend"



    YOU DONT EVER DO THAT UNLESD YOU CAN PULL IT OFF. YOU CANNOT PULL IT OFF.
     
  8. Unless** Typed too fast xD
     
  9. I recommend that you read Gloomi's Guide to Writing. And by the way, people don't actually say "ur". They say "you're".
     
  10. You know what? @D_bo and SmexyHott
    You just trash everything D_Bo cuz ur an idiot
    And Smexyhott(her name is wrong for who she really is) Ur just mad and to childish to let go what I said about your failed little misfits clan
     
  11. Celeste, you're the one who's mad. We're giving feed back like you said. And you get mad for WHAT'S TRUE.


    Stop whining. Write better. Edit better.

    I see you've tried to pull off some story elements that you aren't very good at.

    One word: Proofreading.
     
  12. Lol some of this is obvious hating (don't hate on my lil thread too :eek:) but do try n take the constructive criticism 
    You'll be a better writer for it 