"Kagome, Kagome: A Horror Story" by Inkspell22; concept

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Inkspell22 (01), Jun 7, 2011.

  1. 2nd shot at writing; this time its horror. Which scares me, a lot...
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    A manor too small to be a manor, a day too good to be true. My vacation here was going to be a blast! But then again, why were my family and I staying HERE? It's not a hotel. It's a "manor". ... Not the point. Then again, what were the voices and screams and giggles of children I heard echoing through the halls? Hallucinations? Dreams? ...For real? I shook of the fear of it being true. Day after day I wondered, 'Then again, why did we come anyway? Why is there a bloodstained door at the end of the hall?' Holding my breath,
    One day I decided to enter "The room." I reached a hand out and shakily grasped the doorhandle, turned it, and quietly entered the room. And...I was greeted by a group of children, none of them any older than 11. A green haired girl stepped forward.
    "Hello!" she greeted me warmly. "My name is Miku, but you can call me Miku-chan!"
    "Nice to meet you..." I said, nervously. A girl with one long, blonde side-tied ponytail stepped forward and introduced herself. Her name is Akita Neru. After a short meet-and-greet, they got back to their game. A blue haired boy named Kaito sat in the middles of a moving circle of the kids.
    "Kagome, kagome," they chanted. "Who surrounds you everywhere?"
    "Stop!" Kaito yelled. Pause. "..Miku?"
    Another girl--Teto-- pulled out a knife, and, to my horror, sliced his head off. Kaito's head rolled away, laughing with everyone else.
    "Come back, come back! Don't run away, you'll miss the fun!" Another boy, Len, yelled. And with that, I ran from the bloodstained room.
    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~To be continued.
    Sorry about the length, I just couldn't stopp!!!
     
  2. Good story, creepy ending
     
  3. The ending supposed to be creepy~ Its a horror story. And its to be continued >:3
     
  4. Nice

    This is a great story... If u make it longer, tell me, I want to read it
     
  5. I'll make more chapters, as soon as I can!
     
  6. ~Chapter 2~
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    I ran away, and as I ran, 2 boys--Len and another boy named Taito--Stopped me. I soon realized what all the red splotches on the wall and on their clothes were...Each other's blood. I started freaking out, but Taito locked the door. A pink haired girl named Luka dragged me back with the aid of Rin Kagamine, Len's armless twin sister.

    "HELP ME!" I screeched. The children were unphased. I heard clawing at windows, shadows moving in corners, and I kept re-living what happened to poor little Kaito Shion. They played again, but put Taito in the middle. Round and round they went, chanting their little 'rhyme'.

    "Stop!" Taito yelled. Pause. "...Luka."
    He was right. Everyone told Luka to step in, and she looked afraid. She stared at Taito, and he grinned. To my horror, he pulled out a bow-and-arrow and shot her. She fell to the floor...giggling with the rest of the group. And that's when I blacked out.
    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~To be continued.
     
  7. Vocoloids lol
     
  8. Yes, this is based off a vocaloid song
     
  9. Which one? -proceeds to YouTube-
     
  10. "Kagome Kagome" by Luka Megurine And Miku Hatsune