This is my most recent work, which I'm debating on whether or not to continue. Critiques welcome! Trolls...eh, we'll see. The body slid off my sword and landed with a thud. I laughed. "Is this all they can bring against us?" A deep voice replied, "Guess so" and laughed along with me. I turned to see the owner of the voice, a large man, ragged looking in his dark attire, as he wiped the blood off his daggers. "Clean enough for ya?" He chuckled and began searching the corpses for things of use. I watched as he moved nimbly between bodies and deftly removed trinkets of various values and uses. One would expect Phil, with his massive build, to wield something like a battle axe or a broadsword. But he prefers daggers, and is amazingly adept at using them. I'm just glad he's using them to aid me. "Just gonna stand there Shol?" "Hmm?" I replied. "Your swords." "Get back to work!" He just grinned and continued scouring the dead. I looked around for a cloth suitable for blade cleaning. I spied it upon a headless corpse and walked over to it. I wonder where the head went I thought as I picked up the linen sash. I slid my blade through it, my blade's sharpness sending shivers up my spine. This was my weapon. "Ready to go?" I asked after I finished. "Yep," he replied as he wandered over to me. We walked towards the tunnel and stopped at the entrance."No lights, this is gonna be fun," I stated and smiled. He nodded, "Sure is. Time for payback." I started into the tunnel. "Oh, why did you use only one longsword this time?" he asked. "I thought it would be interesting," I replied as I entered the tunnel and was swallowed by the dark abyss that awaited.
I suck at names too. I had to have just the right name for my main character "Talon". I kept on asking, and I thought I'd never find the right one. It had to be unique but readable, heroic, and the potential to be humorus. It took a while, but it was worth it.
I use names from people I know because I'm not creative enough to think of them. I would put each change of speaker on a new line. "dialouge 1" "dialouge 2" "dialouge 1" instead of "dialouge 1" "dialouge 2" "dialouge 1"
Yeah, thought about that. Noticed at some points it was harder to separate, but wasn't going for perfect structure. Noted though, expect it if I actually write this.