I was running as fast as I could, come on just a little bit closer. Sunwhisker jumps the river with the mountain clan cats right behind him. That was a close one next time I need to check the borders. Sunwhisker keeps on walking through forests and mountains. "I need to find Forest clan." he thought to himself. Then he walks out of the woods and there is a deep hollow where the tree are circling around and dens are sitting there. He started to think to himself "This is my clan." Just as he said that a border patrol spots him and goes after him. He freeze what should I do.
Don't type as thoughts come. Be organized. Used quotes and say who's speaking and how like out loud or just thinking. Other than that, good start.