How not to write a story

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by CoS-Dvoraki, Dec 5, 2010.

  1. Lately it seems 90% of the stories on here are like this:


    I walk on the surface of tje great moon when a voice speaks to me "come lord of rain" and I was like lolwut whose that "yes you come here... And bring the smightsword with you" so I followed the voice. When I reached the source I saw it was a flowing stream.
    me: what do you want
    moon: you are destined to be much more than a misfit with a pathetic sword
    me: 
    moon: yes you lord rain, the creator of my brother and sister moons. You are the chosen one
    me: chosen one? 
    moon: don't ask me, I can't even begin to comprehend it but you dvoraki are destined to be the lord of rain, the master of the gates.
    Me: 
    moon: all I have been instructed to do by my master is to upgrade your sword
    me: your master?
    Moon: you will discover who someday 

    my smightsword began to glow with an eerie light and made a low humming noise. Suddenly, there was a flash and the sword changed colors to white

    moon: your sword now has tje power to split even the strongest mountains.

    I stop stating and my new sword to look at the stream but it has disappeared. 

    *smightsword becomes smightsword II*