History of Ashe Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Dawne, Jul 24, 2012.

  1. Feedback for the Fan fiction story, 'History of Ashe Feedback' which is still in progress, but decided to share some. Any ideas or feedback is welcome.
     
  2. Just some advice, don't switch from past to present tenses. Keep them the same. Is it the past, or the present?
     
  3. Good point ..
     
  4. Mind giving me an example from that story where i changed from past to present? Thanks btw.
     
  5. First sentence is in past tense
    Second sentence is in present
     
  6. I see your point, but I dont see any keywords that would make it present. I see was in the first sentence though. But what part makes second sentence present?
     
  7. " A figure emerges from behind a tall grown wheat plant holding several objects in their hands. An arrow could be heard being stretched and placed on a bowstring..."
     
  8. Example enough?
     
  9. ^^full of win ^_^
     
  10. ^^Full of feathers^^