Please post comments about my book, His Never here, tips or advice, I could use it! Please no haters here! Just constructive critisism!
Interesting start. You made several spelling mistakes, but this could be one of your good stories. Looking forward to reading more. I hope you can also avoid posts in the story as well.
Check spelling other than that pretty good there is a good plot but also describe the setting and characters
Alot of spelling/grammar errors. You tend to describe meaningless details more than your characters. Focus less on the meaningless stuff and more on character development. Either that or keep the meaningless description but step up character development more to match it.
Arimay- Download the app ZepTap Free (I think that's the name) and just paste the chapter there before posting. It'll identify most spelling errors
Still really good, but I find that you use the word "soon" too much. Other than that your really improving!