Hell rising/feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Burningclaw, Dec 19, 2010.

  1. Read my book and post Ur feedback
     
    #1 Burningclaw, Dec 19, 2010
  2. Sounds good! Just try and make the chapters a little longer and it needs a bit editing.
     
    #2 *Spottedleaf2 (01), Dec 19, 2010
  3. Umm no that is one capter 6 entrees
     
    #3 Burningclaw, Dec 19, 2010
  4. Hehe sorry
     
    #4 *Spottedleaf2 (01), Dec 19, 2010
  5. Work on spelling, but good storyline and idea it's unusual to say the least keep writing
     
    #5 *NecroHyphen (01), Dec 19, 2010
  6. great story but storyline is kinda confusing me ?
     
    #6 *LeafstormXAshpelt (01), Dec 19, 2010
  7. Sorry but I'm just gonna b honest........this really is bad. U need to work on punctuation more and ur sentence structure. The way u say the sentences and introduce ppl is like it's from a childs first book. If u want to continue this u seriously need help in editing and learn how to catch ppls interests. Ok now I'm done
     
    #7 german_idiot, Dec 20, 2010
  8. Here's my story

    There once was a kid named Billy who came home from school he was beat up alot so one day he found paper and made a run-on sentence like I am

    Kthxbai
     
    #8 riri488, Dec 20, 2010
  9. what he said
     
    #9 german_idiot, Dec 20, 2010
  10. Um dude this is a kids first book I'm 11
     
    #10 Burningclaw, Dec 20, 2010
  11. Wow ur 11 and ur making stories bout ppl getting killed......if ur gonna do that at least make it good
     
    #11 german_idiot, Dec 20, 2010
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