I decided to just a quick segment from some random idea floating in my head. This isn't going to be a full story, it's just a thought/idea/1 post thing. BTW I copied some of the code from some random website. I do take computer science/studies so I do know how to write code. I just put some random stuff down that probably does nothing and might be wrong lol Enjoy! GAMESTART My head felt heavy as I trudged towards the bathroom. Another morning, another day. Why I get up at 5 AM I don't know. The corridor was pitch black. For some reason my parents decided against putting lights in the corridor. I pushed the bathroom door open and the lights switched on automatically. I stated at my face. 17 years old. Blank, sunken, depressed. Matted long brown hair, bed head. I had been mourning for days since my younger sister had died from starvation. I felt grief that I hadn't had to face before. My eyes slowly wandered from the wooden mirror to the bathroom wall. Spotless blue and white tiles in diagonal patterns. Black shower, gold tub. Lately I had been paying more attention to my surroundings. The colour of the walls, the objects, my dresser... Was this the effect after having seen my sister die right before my eyes? My legs walked against my will outside in my pajamas. This kind of thing had been happening a lot lately too, or maybe...was I always like this, but never noticed? The sky was dark but the sun peaked from the horizon. Our home faced the sea, in fact the whole town was at the edge of the sea on a cliff. The whole country was probably on an island for all I know. My brain stopped thinking. "Probably?" I muttered to myself. Come to think of it I don't even know what the name of the country I'm in. Is...there even a country?... I blinked a few times. My thoughts disappeared and found myself staring at our mailbox. Toren was written on the side of the mailbox. Toren. My last name. Alexa Toren. My name. No middle name. I opened the mailbox and pulled out a bunch of bills and picked up the newspaper on the ground next to the white and red mailbox. Then my feet went back into the house. I had breakfast in our Bayside styled kitchen. Mostly light colored wood tones and light blues. Cereal this morning. Greet mom and dad. I got on my bike and went to school. Then I entered the school. I blinked. I was outside. "What?..." I muttered. It was bright and sunny. It wasn't the morning light anymore. My feet moved against my will like all my other classmates towards the yellow bus. I took a seat quickly at the front. I felt like my brain was about the melt. I was so confused. I never noticed this before. I was the only one on the bus. The bus could go through cars in front of us...the cars seemed transparent?! It was somehow 3:20 PM but the last thing I remembered was 7:00 AM. I...I...couldn't remember going to school! My head hurt so badly. "What is going on...." I moaned. I got off the bus and stumbled inside the house. As soon as I was inside I collapsed on the floor, out like a light. I felt like I was floating. My eyes weren't open but I could see. It was black. Pitch black. Suddenly. Green script flew in front of my eyes. Sub Dim m_Session As Long Dim INTEL As Integer Dim Sim As String Dim Msg As String If m_Session Is Nothing Then Set m_session = New MAPI.Session Else On Error Resume Next M_Session.Logoff Err.Clear On Error GoTo 0 End If INTEL = 80 If Sim = INTEL Msg = "Error, Please restart." MsgBox 16, Msg, "Error" Else Run program End If End Sub What is this? What am I seeing? Suddenly red letter appeared out of no where. ERROR. PROGRAM UNABLE TO START. BUG DETECTED. REBOOTING. Then everything went black. Then: UNABLE TO REBOOT. RUNNING EMERGENCY PROCEDURE. Everything flashed red like police sirens. My mind went blank and I passed out. I slowly cracked my eyes opens. Bright white light met my aching eyes. My whole body hurt, I felt vulnerable for the first time in my life. I person leaned over me with a face of concern. The ceiling. The room. Everything was white or black. I blinked a few times. It felt weird. "Sir! The girl has awakened!" the person above me turned and called. I realized I was on a metal table wearing a hospital gown. The person who had yelled was wearing a white lab cost and glasses. I opened my mouth. "W..Who...?" I croaked. I tried to sit up. I cringed. Everything hurt, everything. The person turned back to me. "Careful!" He grabbed my arms and helped me sit up and lean my back against the wall. It was a guy. Maybe around my age. Green eyes and his hair a colour I couldn't describe. "Are you ok?" He asked. "You've been in there for a long time." I stared. "Where...a long time?" I asked. Another flash of concern on his face. Then a second person appeared. It was a women this time. "Seems like she lost her memory too..." the women trailed off, scrubbing on a clipboard. She peered at me through her glasses. "No injuries...a bit weak...hmmm..." "W..what's...g...going on?" I asked my voice hoarse. The boy looked at me with even more worry. "It's really complicated...you should wait until you feel better." he said. "No!" I yelled. I winced. Pain from my side. The lady took off her glasses and sighed. "Just tell her." She said. Suddenly a loud beeping noise was heard. "Looks like another one is coming. Give her a simple explanation Jake." The lady patted Jake on the shoulder and hurried off. "Jake...that's...your name?" I asked. The boy nodded. "Anyway...I'll try to keep it simple...um...well...the best way to put it...uh well...you see..." Jake stuttered. I stared at him. Jake bit his lip and opened his mouth. "You've been in a video game." Let me know what you think! Leave all comments on this thread thanks! Storallelite
"nothing" is not a term in any programming language, as far as I know :3 Also, I DEMAND THIS CONTINUES!!
That's what I thought...that was the part I copied from the random website. I wrote the second part of the code...I'm pretty sure it's right lol It's really that good? I didn't edit this at all so sorry for all the spelling mistakes and typo's. Idk if I'll continue, I still have greed's thorned vines to write but maybe I will
BTW this is kinda based off the Sims 3, so like the school bus, the rabbit hole buildings and the cars.
yuck. you've been writing fail stories for a long time here. it's time to find something else, that you can actually be successful at
d_bo if you think everything here is so crappy, why don't you go and write a story to show us all up. I like it a lot. Like cheesemuffin, I DEMAND A CONTINUE!!
@d_bo Perhaps instead of just insulting me and putting people down, why not try your hand at constructive criticism? I know I'm not a pro so I can't compare to published authors and that's why I ask for feedback and comments. @Smexy Ty Maybe I'll continue
Is this a story or poem? It's in a poem format and d_bo go write your own story and see what we think
It's a story, it's just that to try and give off the feeling that when the character was in the video game she didn't/wasn't able to think properly. So it ended up in bits and pieces like that. BTW this is my alt account
Interesting, I'd say try to develop coding into the story with different types of code. e.g. Ruby, Magic, HTML etc. I would also be pleased if the story was continued.