Feedback for Fall Apart

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by DareDeviI, Mar 15, 2012.

  1. My first stroy for fan fiction hop u like it :) pls post critiques so can can make chapter 1 better than the intro ;)
     
    #1 DareDeviI, Mar 15, 2012
  2. Story*
     
    #2 DareDeviI, Mar 15, 2012
  3. Its a copy from I'd Tell You I Love You But I'd Have to Kill You -.-
     
    #3 XxBrooke_ParisXx, Mar 15, 2012
  4. No its not lol, ive had this intro in my notes for about a month, couldnt decide what names to use
     
    #4 DareDeviI, Mar 15, 2012
  5. Copy Copy Copy copy
     
    #5 XxBrooke_ParisXx, Mar 15, 2012
  6. Chapter 1 posted ;)
     
    #6 DareDeviI, Mar 15, 2012
  7. I like it and its a cool idea but I'm cringing because you aren't capsizing I and spelting can't without an apostrophe.
     
    #7 BonkersLeighRose, Mar 15, 2012
  8. Chapter 2 posted :)
     
    #8 DareDeviI, Mar 15, 2012
  9. Ty Rose i will work on it :)
     
    #9 DareDeviI, Mar 15, 2012
  10. Chapter 3 posted xD
     
    #10 DareDeviI, Mar 20, 2012
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