Yep, feedback thread for my story. I came back here after realizing that I didn't want to do downfall of darkness, since some character details wouldn't fit. So yeah... Post feedback, constructive criticism.
I suggest you change the name. Too many things are called revenge. And the story so far is pretty typical but meh, it's ok.
This chapter has parts of 3 different places. The five dashes indicate that the next part takes place somewhere else.