All feedback should be posted here (duh it's called a feedback thread) this is the first story I've ever written so pls don't be to hard. HELPFUL criticism will be excepted but pls don't come here just to hate on my story soooooooo........ Hope you like it
Great i screwed up already 1the third persons name the teacher calls out is "syla nervayu" not just "nervayu" btw: pronounced (sy-lu) y sounds like y in why and u sounds like u in umbrella (ner-vay-you) hopefully self explanatory
Also sorry about the extra threads they should be let to die also I forgot the word "are" somewhere in there after I reread it don't worry there'll still be more mistakes I dont catch
Hey don't worry if I wrote a story I would make so many mistakes the reader couldn't understand it Besides that great so far can not wait for the next chapter
Btw I knew u would like the 'he thinks the can control air but he does' part of my characters new bio
The story and the feedback got double posted... I like the story, but the grammar and capitalization could be worked on.
It's good, it's got great potential. All you have to do is put it into paragraph form, so it flows better. Otherwise, I see no problems with it. You've attracted the writer Cheese! Your honor level increased!
Oh, and the cowbells thing is a reference to Christopher Walken. He yelled at a meeting once, "I NEED MORE COWBELL"