Dwarven Dimension Character Creation

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by CHAOS_ASSASSIN, Jul 16, 2012.

  1. Well to start it off it's about an alternate dimension filled with dwarves with a gigantic kingdom. Then some travelers get transported to the dimension and try to escape the new land. That is all I'm going to tell you.



    Name-
    Age-
    Gender-
    Race-Dwarf or Human
    (Dwarf only) Town job-(Blacksmith Farmer Hunter Gatherer or Miner)
    Personality-
    Appearance-
    (Human only) Talent-(Archer or Swordsman)
    (Human only) Bacpack Contents-(knife food water ect)



    Here is the main character

    Name-Sentaral Greymane
    Age 23
    Gender-Male
    Race-Human
    Personality-Fierce arrogant and just gets his way through violence
    Appearance-Rugged cloak one leather glove tattered leggings and a light brown shirt
    Talent-Swordsman
    Backpack contents-One water bottle three apples and a hunting knife
     
  2. Your synopsis is horribly unappealing.
    In case you haven't noticed, you aren't very skilled. Please return (or don't, and actually keep that BS promise you made about never returning) once you've improved. A LOT.
     
  3. What is synopsis?
     
  4. I just took a break from fan fiction and I've gotten way more mature
     
  5. Well I'm going to start
     
  6. First, learn what a synopsis is.
    Then reconsider it.
     
  7. K I know what it is
     
  8. Here's a better one
     
  9. Sentaral Greymane and his companions have been mysteriously transported to a strange dimension where everyone is a dwarf. Him and his companions soon realize they need to gather materials to return to their dimension, but find themselves in a struggle to survive due to the war that is going on between the two dwarf kingdoms. They barely get out of the open fire. They find another human and he has a strange message that will change their lives forever.
     
  10. Change that to They barely make it out of the open fire AND not they and then continue the sentence
     
  11. Not good enough, still pretty darn bad.
     
  12. It's still better
     
  13. Im going to make an even better one after my vacation
     
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  15. Finally, someone who understands the delicateness, but meaningfulness of "lolz".
     
  16. Feather make a character or get off my thread.