Downfall Of Darkness ~ Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 4, 2011.

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  1. This is my feedback for my story, Downfall Of Darkness.


    Please, do NOT post on the actual story thread. Thank you!


    Chapter one is out! Sorry It's so short!
     
    #1 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 4, 2011
  2. I likes it. Just a bit of show don't tell, but that's very hard to do at the beginning of a story like this.
     
    #2 matzah, Nov 4, 2011
  3. Thanks mat!
     
    #3 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 4, 2011
  4. O.O MOOOORE!!!
     
    #4 *FlareEXE (01), Nov 4, 2011
  5. Thank you, flare!
     
    #5 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 4, 2011
  6. How often can we expect releases?
     
    #6 *FlareEXE (01), Nov 4, 2011
  7. I don't know. It depends on how much homework I have.
     
    #7 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 4, 2011
  8. I






    AM









    HOOKED









    ALREADY!



    If you don't come out with more soon, I think I'll have to kill you.
     
    #8 RenamedPhoenix, Nov 4, 2011
  9. Lol I feel ur pain
     
    #9 *FlareEXE (01), Nov 4, 2011
  10. o_O



    Homework, please don't be hard...
     
    #10 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 5, 2011
  11. Homework is never what u want it 2 b
     
    #11 *FlareEXE (01), Nov 5, 2011
  12. great work i can wait to see more
     
    #12 *Magickous (01), Nov 5, 2011
  13. Sorry to the people who made Zoro and Scarecrow. I changed their names to Soba and Soma.
     
    #13 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 5, 2011
  14. Bump. Chapter Two is out!
     
    #14 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 5, 2011
  15. Bump...
     
    #15 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 7, 2011
  16. I can has moar plz?
     
    #16 Allioss, Nov 7, 2011
  17. Maybe 
     
    #17 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 7, 2011
  18. I really like it. You really describe her emotions without saying "He was angry" or such. The text flows nicely and I found myself instantly enjoying it.
    I can't wait for the next part :)
     
    #18 *OkamiAmaterasu (01), Nov 9, 2011
  19. Thank you 
     
    #19 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 9, 2011
  20. Chapter Three Out Today!
     
    #20 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Nov 10, 2011
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