Long term project due to education I probably won't finish like usual fashion! Just post feedback here please ------------------------------------------------ Demonic Returns An eary silence descended on the plane. The constant flicker of the overheard lights illuminated the restless people below. "nine hour delays" Jack thought to himself. People onboard were just falling asleep. For Jack, however, sleep wasn't appealing. His nightmares about heights and cramped spaces struck fright into his very core. Jack's grip tightened a little on the chair rest. "Just a little longer" he thought, then he would land on solid ground, along with his wife to be, Alice. The new, refreshing thought crushed his anxiety and fright. Gazing across to his left where Alice had fallen asleep. An angel in her own right. Something about her made the animal feeling inside pur with an ever growing interest. This was then replaced by fear ... The seatbelt light firmly settled on that glow. Something was going wrong, the plane lurched into a dive...
I'd like to disagree with that. Fanfic is still recovering from a recent inundation of noobs. Yes, you have to engage your brain, but it doesn't make sense. It's extremely confusing the way you have it.
Still recovering? It hasn't recovered to begin with... The way I've written it is meant to be confusing, I intended to give clues with the italics.
Attempting to recover. Our opinions didn't bring those writers here, did they? If you meant for it to be confusing, you wanted us confused, correct? If so, then why tell us exactly what the italics meant? Now we'll know for the rest of your story.