BloodRedTears An Iwrite Co production! Feedback!

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *AngelsEnigma (01), Jul 8, 2010.

  1. :lol: Feedback for my new story BloodRedTears :twisted:
     
    #1 *AngelsEnigma (01), Jul 8, 2010
  2. Intresting. It's a good start.
     
    #2 *Irin (01), Jul 8, 2010
  3. Thanks but that was like if it was a book...what would be ont he back xD :cool: first chapter u and i think its some of my best work
     
    #3 *AngelsEnigma (01), Jul 8, 2010
  4. Very good Angel!
     
    #4 Bastion, Jul 8, 2010
  5. Nice nice
     
    #5 roflman, Jul 8, 2010
  6. So it's good and thanks guys I think this is going to be a good storu
     
    #6 *AngelsEnigma (01), Jul 8, 2010
  7. So it's good and thanks guys I think this is going to be a good storu
     
    #7 *AngelsEnigma (01), Jul 8, 2010
  8. Good start very nice
     
    #8 mathew057, Jul 8, 2010
  9. Thanks
     
    #9 *AngelsEnigma (01), Jul 9, 2010
  10. Bump
     
    #10 Bastion, Sep 15, 2010
  11. Your only problem? Adjuctive use. Your showing instead of telling. Instead of giving a long dry description, try to sneak it into the story. I.e
    I brushed my long black hair out of my face as opposed to I have black hair.
     
    #11 *iPimella (01), Sep 15, 2010
  12. Good story line!
     
    #12 *Spottedleaf2 (01), Sep 15, 2010
  13. I don't get it....
     
    #13 Fangedwolf, Sep 15, 2010
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