Because of Her: Feedback 

Its okay

 

it's ok. you say he's a Nazi, yet he's helping a Jew?

 

He doesn't wanna be a nazi. Did you read the story completely? Seriously... Work on comprehension.

 

Feather just correct him, no need to do any more than that.

It's alright but i really need more before i can make a comment.

 

"full-fledged nazi" not "pretending-be-a-nazi-to-save-his-life"

 

No, don't quit! I like it!

 

Too early to say, but I think you could do with some more back ground research.
Usually the kids were more likely to be nazi believers than the parents.
Because of the constant propaganda and hitler youth etc
The adults experienced a previous time where as the children did not.

However the actual storey it's self seems like it could be a nice read.
Good luck =D

 

Pimd?

 

you need to do a bit of background research Hun, as someone said above me it was the kids who believed in Hitlers ideas more, doesn't matter if you live in Germany, that's still correct what they said. My comments on the short novella would be that it has potential, a few grammatical errors need sorting out such as "full-fledged" it should be "fully-fledged" and some punctuation to, but all in all it's quite enjoyable good job, I'd love to see more description!! What does Arthur look like? His surroundings and such like

 

See what y'all have done... -.-

 

Gawd guys, I leave for a while and this is what I come back to.

~Han x

 

I didn't mean the story by the way, I liked it.

~ Han x

 

Lol.

 

Necrobump. /lock