Matt and his friend Henry were riding down the hill into the forest on their horses.The horses walked into the forest and galloped to the sea.They smelled something.Then a Creature jumped up and ingulfed Henry
Matt woke up with a terrible nightmare.It was that Henry had died.Henry was still alive just inside the creature's stomach.Matt decided to go to the sea.He would go at Midnight. Matt grabbed his scooba-diving gear and went for his horse.When he got his horse he galloped off into the woods.He came across the same clearing.He jumped off his horse and then put on his gear.Matt jumped in and swam down,down,down.He found a old city.Then he saw it.A huge octopus with guards.At that moment Matt knew where he was.Atlantis
At that moment the guards saw Matt.Matt took out his sword and swam towards the octopus'.Matt then started swinging his sword.The first octopus he hit in the tentacle.It drowned.Then they all swarmed him.The last thing before everything went black Matt remembered were tentacles pushing him into a mouth.
Matt landed in the mouth and skidded down the tongue.He then woke up.He saw Henry lying there,breathing.Matt said to Henry,"We should kill him from the inside"."Yeah"Henry said.Just before they did that the octopus threw up.Matt and Henry landed on a deck.Then the octupus'all formed together and a nightmare came to real life.It was Zuthemerak of Despair.
Don't listen to the idiots. This isn't bad. Stay creative. (Although it killed me that you didn't put a space after your punctuation marks).
Cheese, you lie... It's pretty bad. The idea is overused, so it can pretty much only be pulled off if you can actually write. Guess what? ... He can't.
Matt gaped in horror at Z'uthermerak.Z'uthmerak dove down and Matt and Henry scrambled out of the way.Z'uthermerak broke the dock and went underwater making a huge splash,drenching Matt and Henry.Matt ran to the water and jumped in.Matt kicked to Z'uthermerak and swung his sword,narrowly missing him.Then,Z'uthermerak hit Matt and he flew out of the water.Sputtering for air,Matt coughed but put it behind him and ran.He would have to tell the king about the awakening.
Book 2:The Idea By coldplay902 It was a long walk to the palace.Especially the stairs.Matt was on his 1 thousanth step and still was not done."Still another 100 steps to go ."Matt wheezed,he hated this.Matt got to the stairs and said to a guard"I have a request for the king."All the guard did was laugh.So Matt said"seriously."The guard let Matt in and he went to the king."My honor,"Matt said,I have some important news for you.""What is it?""Z'uthermerak of Despair has awakened.""What!" The king roared,"how do you know this?"Z'uthermerak ate Henry and me".How'd you come out alive?""He threw up.""Okay,here's my plan gather my soldiers and go to where you saw them.""Right away,My honor."And with that Matt went down the stairs of the palace.
The journey to gather the soldiers took very long.By the time they were done it was dusk.They had the meeting in the ampitheater,and it was crazy.The minute Matt said Z'uthermerak they had hoisted them on their shoulders and started walking to the lake.By the looks Matt and Henry were giving each other it was clear they thought it was way overrated.When they got to the lake a soldier yelled,"Silence!"They took battle positions and dove in the lake.Matt was with a group of soldiers that would distract Z'uthermerak and Henry's group would make the blow.The plan worked perfectly.Matt's group distracted Z'uthermerak and Henry and his group ripped of 3 tentacles.It was a victory!
Ok, here's something that would greatly help. AFTER A PUNCTUATION MARK (!?,.") ADD A SPACE. Unless your space bar is genuinely destroyed, you have no excuse.