My eyes opened as the door closed shut diving off the bed I grabbed the chest under my bed pulling out a spell book a launched a fire ball the assailants way grabbing a knife I turned to investigate as a assailant
Jumped out at me ending his life with a blow to the neck the other one was charred at the door way looking at the one I had knifed I realized I knew those tattoos. My past had finally caught up with me
Grabbing the contents of my chest which contains a sword a dagger and a lightweight chestplate all made in the mountains of the elves hidden city and a assassins kit ( If you don't know that contains two short blades a white silk cloak meant to look like a monks garb poison two hidden knives and 15 throwing knives
Setting my house afire so the king would think I was dead I rode my fastest horse out of the city swearing I would get revenge
Nice plot, but you need to work on your spelling and grammar. Use your notes app, or get a writing one so you can reread your work and correct any mistakes. Also make sure you don't repeat words too much.
I like where it say 'my past has finally caught up with me'. It would be a great ending to the first chapter, because it sort of leaves you hanging and makes you want to read more.
I'm not joking I think she is speaking two advanced for a fifth grade class she got so mad at me for not getting the write answers