April ran toward me screaming . I grasped for her hand as she was sucked back into the black hole . I woke up screaming at the top of my lungs , my sister Cheza sitting up in the other bed across the room doing the same thing . " April" she said to me " we have got to stop having the same dreams I don't care if we are twins " . " I'm not the one who keeps subconsciously sucking my sister into my dreams but same here " I replied . Yeah, funny as it was I was April . I had been sucked into my sister Cheza's dream . Just then our mom ran through our door " everything okay ?" . " yeah mom " Cheza and I said in unison . " okay um still creepy " mom said " guess I'm still not used to that " . Cheza and I laughed . " it's been 14 years mom " I said as Cheza just said " wow " . If you couldn't tell she's more of the silent type . " up and at em " my mom said " you don't want to be late for your first day of highschool " . Yep highschool . What a bunch of fun this day should be .
Continued story ------------------------------------------------ I got up and got dressed in some jeans shorts and a red tank top . Florida was very warm today so I decided it would be okay to wear flip flops today instead of my gray converses . My straight orange hair hung just below my shoulders . I looked in the mirror . My green eyes still looked clouded with sleep . I looked over at Cheza and saw she was dressed almost identical except for her tank top was blue . Figures . I absolutely despised being identified by shirt colors . Ugh .... I grabbed my binder and walked out the door , down the stairs to the living room . 5 minutes until we had to leave for the bus . I yawned . It was way too early for school . I mean seriously going to school at 6:30?! Idiotic . " hurry up!" I shouted up the stairs at my sister . I walked back to the living room and grabbed my binder again . I heard a few thuds on the stairs then someone screamed . Cheza tripped over her purse on the way down the stairs . I helped her up " you okay?" . " yup let's go " she replied and we headed out the door to the bus stop
Good plot and writing, just here are some QBT's helpful hints: • When using punctuation, use it like this. Never leave a gap between the first word and the punctuation , like this . This is the wrong way to do it. This, is the right way. So always leave a gap after the punctuation, but not before. Ok? Got that? • Use paragraphs. It gets confusing to keep reading the same block. • New speaker, new line. That's pretty self-explanatory. • Finally, if you are using speech, there are a couple of important things. Firstly, look at this explanation: Tom shouted, "where's the cat gone?" See how I have used a comma before the speech, then opening speech marks, what the person says, then either full stop, comma, question or exclamation mark, and then finished it with closing brackets. Also, if the sentence before had a full stop, then the next speech should be about the person in the sentence. If it isn't, then a new line is required. Lastly, if it's a new sentence but speech, use a capital at the beginning. That's it!!! Please wall me if you are confused, or check some stories on FanFic to see how you should write something. I recommend KaW Chronicles. Or mine, but anyone would recommend their own have fun, and a great story so far. BY THE WAY, THIS ISN'T CRITICISM! ITS JUST HELPING YOU! Just thought I would clear that up