a story in process: revised

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Valkyrie_Cain (01), Jul 19, 2011.

  1. I open my curtains to the sight of beauty. There, the fireflies glimmer and fly back and forth for not a care in the world. I lay my head of my crossed arms to such a magnificent scene. Then I spot something that puts a smile to my face. A couple in the background holding hands and dancing around freely. Then I knew that was the meaning of love. I let my eye lashes flutter and soon my eye lids shut. I then find myself dreaming; dreaming that one day I will find true love. Love that the couple showed together that night.




    :) please comment below :)
     
  2. ᏝᎧᏤᏋ ᎥᎿ
     
  3. Is that name .... Valkyrie Cain... From Skullduggery Pleasent?
     
  4. I lay my head on* ughhhhh stupid spell check
     
  5. very nice!
     
  6. Thanks you tell your friends
     
  7. Amazing Poem/story! Try to build on the story or make a new story which you can build on!
     
  8. It's even better lol u should add on to it and make it more interesting
     
  9. Thanks huskers 
     
  10. Nice, such a sweet scene. Just be careful not to over describe.(You didn't do it but I think you could be in danger of over describing perhaps.) can't say much about plot/progression because there's so little. You should write more.
     
  11. Thank you and I see where youare coming from
     
  12. Really awesome story/poem 
    Please make a full story of it, I'll read every bit of it 
     
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