A New Land

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by IllIll_Jay_IllIll, Mar 25, 2011.

  1. Chapter 1 "Discovery"

    April 19th 1568



    As the ships of the Kuku had spent many months at sea after their nation was destroyed by the Zewha land was finally seen. Not knowing where they were the Kuku were very scared hoping they wouldn't enter a enemies land. Just as the ships reached shore Monku the leader of the Kuku's realized where they were. "It's real!" Monku suddenly shouted. "What?" Answered Nehiro quickly. "The land of Babylon this is where the legendary war happened.". "What war?". "A long time ago the biggest threat to our people were the sky demons. They attacked us a lot but one day star shock took at stand." Explained Monku. "Star shock what kind of a name is that?" Asked Nehiro. "He and his army defeated these dreaded demons easily. His golden bow never misses and he has the spirit of the chosen one.". "The chosen one? Who is he?". "He fell a long time ago in the greatest battle ever to happen.". "Tell me more." Said Nehiro you could tell he was curious. "That is all I know young one." Said Monku as he looked into the blazing sun. "Really but your our master you have to know about this.". "I only wish I knew more son I really do.".




    This is a small book leading up to a series I hope that you enjoyed it leave feedback here and tell me if I should continue this
     
  2. Any more feedback on this?
     
  3. Anyone even read this?
     
  4. Thats some good work :) just make sure to proof-read it for any errors, and also i think it will make an amazing series eventually
     
  5. I don't know if I should make a series about what happened before this though