its good so far, but the idea and concept has been used in some other books and movies. Maybe a lil twist to make it unique?
Good 4 a first story! Needs a tad more action or past memories like how Echo discovered her powers or something
Interesting concept. However you may want to divide it into chapters to organize it more. And the plot should begin to appear by now.
Hmm... Only asking for nice comments? You'll never improve. Also NEVER bump a story unless it's at least on the 3rd page...
Oh shut up gloomi she's new here. Smatherine take my advice and just let these kinds of people pass by you. Don't let them break you down.
I'm not trying to break her down arimay... No need to get your panties in a twist. You must be able to listen to constructive criticism. If you have 5 people telling you that your organization is bad, it probably is something you need to work on. I make a point never to say I hate the story. That isn't beneficial to you as a writer. I do how ever make an effort to point the things out that you need to work on. No matter what, you MUST be able to handle constructive criticism. However if some one comes on your thread and says I hate your story and I hate you, arimays right, just ignore them. @ Arimay, if you ignore CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, your story will not improve. Take footprints in the sand for example. You obviously have some talent for writing. For a 12 year old, it's pretty good. However you consistently ignore any help anyone tries to give you, and thus your story shows the same mistakes over and over again.