Good or No?

Discussion in 'Strategy' started by MiTouch-, Sep 11, 2012.

  1. So hey guys... I just wanna get some feed back on a song ive written for my girlfriend for her birthday.. Its tomorrow and i need to know if this is good or no so i can change up the lyrics a bit early :) thanks! 

    Forever and Always by Me :3

    Verse 1:

    I wake up in the morning
    Shes the first thing that i see
    She shines like the sunlight
    That brightens up my day
    And as i move closer
    I feel the beating of her heart
    Telling me dont leave me
    Cause i need you in my life

    Chorus:

    Baby i'll be here, forever and always
    By your side through the good and the ugly
    And baby you'll be here, forever and always
    In my heart..

    Verse 2:

    Throughout my whole life
    I have never felt this way
    To feel like theres someone
    Who's always there for me
    The time you came to me
    Was the best time of my life
    Cause girl you have changed me
    And brough light to my life

    (repeat chorus 1x)

    The End :)


    Well that pretty much it! :) thanks for reading, please dont troll, i just need some feedback of how it looks :)
     
  2. I wouldn't suggest going on forums for this type of thing since you will likely get trilled but either way good song.
     
  3. Seems decent.
     
  4. Op has a girlfriend? :shock:
     
  5. You're going to get trolled. But IMO..
    It's beautiful. I'd cry if my boyfriend wrote me a song.
     
  6. It's Rly good but like what kind of beat does it go to just to get the feel 4 it
     
  7. Its an acoustic song so the beat would be : down down up up down up down up down down up up and just keep repeating it :)
     
  8. I meant strumming pattern :)
     
  9. Why cry moose 
     
  10. I notice this is under strategy... I mean, TECHNICALLY, if you think about it THAT way...
     
  11. Pretty good lyrics
     
  12. Yesi noticed.. Thanks guyss
     
  13. Very sweet, killer I think it's good as is
     
  14. Wow that's awesome nice job there mate you made moose cry it's hard to make a guy cry xD ain't it moose
     
  15. Wow gave me a tear just sang it lol and my misses heard it now she's crying xD and our baby heard it to she's kicking her >:3