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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Storallelite, Feb 12, 2011.

  1. I decided to try my hand at a new type of genre that I haven't used much in the past. (I will be continuing Atlantric: Unknown.)
    I'm writing this chapter off the top of my head to try this idea out.(I know I should be planning) I'm skipping the prologue too. If I continue it will be planned to be a short story.
    Please leave comments on this thread if you think I should continue or not. :) thanks!

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    (The Map Maker)

    Chapter 1- Trades
    My eyes carefully watched the black line of ink make it's presence on the paper, my steady hand guiding it.
    The dim light of many candles help my sight.
    I finish with a quick signature in the corner and remove my quill.
    Delia Franco it reads in my perfect handwriting.
    Standing up I look proudly at my newest map.
    Each line so carefully made.
    So much effort, months to be exact.
    It was at least worth 2 months worth of food.
    My hand absentmindedly undos the bun my dark brown hair is in, combing it with my fingers.
    It's been 3 months since my farther died leaving me and my older brother.
    I turn towards an old wooden bordered mirror. A tired expression reflects back.
    My dark orange/green eyes are heavy lidded and red with tiredness.
    My dress wrinkled, dirty with ink and wax.
    I start to realize how hungry I am, my thoughts drifting away into dreams.
    The door opens and slams closed with a bang.
    I jump out of my thoughts and turn around, only to see my older brother Richard come to my work area.
    His features are mirror images of my own but he looks more like our mother while I take more from our father. His features are sharper,he's much taller and lean, his eyebrows more curved. My face is softer and rounder, I'm rather short and my eyebrows have little curve but we both have the same eyes.
    He looks dirty from riding, his hair looks windblown as he approaches.
    "Hello sister!" He says happily.
    "Hello brother. You've been riding?" I ask calmly
    "With Lily." He says a sappy look going across his face.
    I can't help but smile.
    He's been visiting a young lady a few years in his junior in the past 5 months. Her name is Lily Tay. She lives in a neighboring village only a few miles away.
    "Have you finished the map?" Richard asks me
    "Yes..." I let out a yawn. "I think I'll take a nap now..." I mummer
    "Very well, but the remember to wake up early tomorrow! The queen has asked for you to go to court on urgent matters." Richard reminded
    I just nodded and waved him off.
    The queen had asked me to go to court by letter a week ago. For what reason I did not know.
    I hear Richard leaving the area.
    I flop onto a nearby couch and instantly fall asleep.

    Please let me know what you think!
     
  2. Sounds interesting. May want a different font for title though.
     
  3. @Star lol thx but that isn't a font it's made up of Unicode symbols
    @Feather I'll take that as a yes to continue?
     
  4. Yay! My story! Well, your story but.... You know what I mean!
     
  5. Lol yeah, I think I need a few characters...so I might get u to make one lady.
    The only problem is I have like no outline lol. I think I might try writing the story out of my head...see what happens...
     
  6. I did that with battle camp: the rebellion. Each chapter was its own. I WANNA MAKE A CHARACTER!!!!
     
  7. Hmmm looks like I should read it then
    I think I'll need three to five characters at most, three male, two female.
    Should I make a new sign up thread?
     
  8. It's great stora!
     
  9. Ty Irin :)
    I'll be continuing, please sign up!