Hello arimay! Didn't know you still were an active player... I encourage you to use more details and emotion, since you're a girl. I'm currently writing a horrific romance because I'm weak when it comes to girl PoVs... Point of Views.... The reason being I'm a guy... PS: How'd you get that font?
Cheese, you can stop trying to ostracize me. I'm just not in the mood. I've become numb to you. This is a feedback thread. It's where you leave feedback. I left feedback. You can leave if you like
I love it. It is very sad though. I think maybe you should expand on characters more. Give them details.
Love story stuff isn't really my favorite, but I still liked it! Not really sure how to help you improve it... @cheese: Might as well give it up, Feather's big ego has clogged up his ears. Who knows? Maybe one day it will clog his windpipe...
Great story, needs more emotion and descriptive words. Try replacing a noun and an adjective with a word that represents both. You're a female so you should be able to put more emotions in it than most males can. Also, fix those spelling mistakes and ur ready to go
What's the girls name? After the entire thing I couldn't figure it out. Express more detail, I could not picture anything in my head and watch for wording "she had the most craziest parties" doesn't sound right. I read my stories aloud to know how they sound. Hope that helps. Overall the story was good